For today, I am posting an acrostic. I tried an unusual format, with the rhyming words being inside their lines. Not sure if it works. Also, the end words are weak: black, flawed, thoughts, justice, etc. Also, it's a bit sappy. That being said, it's a brilliant poem. LOL.
Brittania
Between sips of morning brew, my pen
Returns to you. I
fill the white space with black
Ink, or perhaps blue.
I write another acrostic,
Tear it up, begin anew.
These lines are flawed,
This tribute an imperfect re-do, these thoughts
An awkward déjà vu.
You’re muse and art,
Needle and tattoo.
I… try to do you justice.
I’m still struggling with your voodoo, your magic,
And I wish I knew how to translate it into a poem.
Note: I modified the last line.
Note: I modified the last line.
This is beautiful. I really like it and a lot of thought went into this.
ReplyDeleteThanks.
DeleteI think I've been relying on acrostics a bit too much lately. It's directing but it's also limiting.
I read the poem and liked it a lot. Had not noticed the title before I read the poem ... the title puts a little spin on it and I still like it :D
ReplyDeleteThanks.
ReplyDeleteYeah - I could have just called her Britt but that would have been too easy.
That last line, while "sappy" is also both sweet and the epitome of the creator's lament--how to make the art actually show what we want it to.
ReplyDeleteYeah. It was written to give it to her,so I might have worried more about message than technical stuff. But 'hug' carries a lot of meaning. It would just be boring to explain it.
DeleteI like it. Sappy or not, it gets the message across. :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks.
DeleteEven though you think this is not good, it touched my heart. There is a rhyming to it that makes you want to reach out and discover how to hug.
ReplyDeleteGood job.
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Patricia @ EverythingMustChange
Thanks.
DeleteNicely put together!
ReplyDeletegood job!
ReplyDeleteBest Wishes,
Annette
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